Month: March 2017

sun breaks out

bird feeder full

only squirrels 

at coffee shop 

savoring artwork 

latte masterpiece 

jazz and java

at the coffeehouse

mind still ho-hum

gray spring day

searching for color

red twig dogwood 

springtime

possibilities  abound

thinking of a nap

day one of spring

sun for just awhile

flower bulbs stir

Or edited with fewer words:

spring

bit of sun

bulbs stir

water’s 

winter mood

ice shoves

tears of joy

peeling the onion

being yourself

Previous post highlights fun of using a few words. So what

happened to the haiku “rule” of 5-7-5 syllables in three lines?

This “rule” came from attempts to follow Japanese form of

5-7-5 sounds of their language vs syllables in English.

Using 17 syllables in English often results in using word

the, a or elongating words unnecessarily. E.g. 17 vs 12 syllables:

reading in winter                              winter reading

no need to turn the pages               no turning pages

i am watching clouds                         watching clouds

 

 

Some of the fun of haiku is to paint a picture for the reader

in as few words as possible:

flame 

moth

ends