sun breaks out
bird feeder full
only squirrels
Month: March 2017
at coffee shop
savoring artwork
latte masterpiece
jazz and java
at the coffeehouse
mind still ho-hum
gray spring day
searching for color
red twig dogwood
springtime
possibilities abound
thinking of a nap
day one of spring
sun for just awhile
flower bulbs stir
Or edited with fewer words:
spring
bit of sun
bulbs stir
water’s
winter mood
ice shoves
tears of joy
peeling the onion
being yourself
Previous post highlights fun of using a few words. So what
happened to the haiku “rule” of 5-7-5 syllables in three lines?
This “rule” came from attempts to follow Japanese form of
5-7-5 sounds of their language vs syllables in English.
Using 17 syllables in English often results in using word
the, a or elongating words unnecessarily. E.g. 17 vs 12 syllables:
reading in winter winter reading
no need to turn the pages no turning pages
i am watching clouds watching clouds
Some of the fun of haiku is to paint a picture for the reader
in as few words as possible:
flame
moth
ends
